Play tester feedback (28/1/2014)

* Having finally spell checked my work and rearranged it to look more like a CYOA. I decided to send it off for play testing in order to make sure my game was completely up to standard before handing it in.

You can see the feedback I got below...

• Loved the starting chase scene as it was tense enough as well as the atmospheric conversation with the woman in red that made a good juxtaposition as opposed to the other scene mentioned.
• Spotted the odd spelling mistake and sentence structure that I then fixed. 
• Replaced the odd word that would fit better depending on the scene, for example. I changed 'early' to 'ahead of schedule' as it seems to fit in when writing about someone going on shift.
• One play tester was a bit confused about the scientist and thought they should be a doctor due to the scene with the pregnant lady. However, I reminded them that in this world scientists are considered both medical and scientific as the poster in the class room tells the player they will learn brand new sciences including marine biology and chemistry.
• Noticed at some points that I had 'go ahead' or 'go back' to certain pages when in fact it was the opposite, thus I changed this. This is very important in a book like this.
• Another play tester was confused by the fact that they started in the present only to be sent back to the past, then to the scene before they got on board the sub in the first place. I admit that looking back at this it seems a bit odd since its so early in the game, however, I felt it was important to have an establishing scene for the fact that the world is underwater. Otherwise that may never have come across during the classroom. This scene also adds to the atmosphere of the book and allows the reader to imagine quite a strong image in their head from the start e.g. a ruined city underwater.
• Overall, the book functions as intended and all the decisions seem to go to the correct pages.